Jim, as we often do, you might have some wrong reasons for dislikingyour ownshot ; )Please, it's not avicious image at all! But could be improved substantiallyonce you could get rid of the distracting elements following the suggestions above.
Btw, it even reminds me a well knownphotograph by Robert Doisneau : Side Glance (1953) :!:
Fantastic observation! It really is a similar concept.
I think thecrop and B&W were a great help. Reflections are tough. When I shoot cars it's hard to keep my imageout of the pictureI want.