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Old Jun 4, 2012, 12:35 PM   #1
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Old Jun 4, 2012, 1:00 PM   #2
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The model is attractive, but the shot leaves a lot to be desired to my eye. First, the subject is too close to the background, so the flash throws a shadow that is distractiing. Second, the flash is too harsh. Either bounce the light from a reasonable distance or take it off-camera to provide some shadows on her face. I don't know what 9.3mm focal length equates to in 35mm equivalent for your camera, but it sure looks like you were just too close. If your camera has zoom capability, try to back off by a factor of two or three, and zoom with the lens to get in close. FWIW
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G'day Stan

Thanks for showing us one of your portraits & asking for our cc

- I agree with TC for much of it as well
9,5mm on the Fuji [28mm in dSLR terms] is too wide-angle for portrait imagery

The camera is so close to the subject that the nose starts to visually dominate the result > I suggest that by try your portraits at about 4x to 6x zoom [about 75-100mm on the HS20 lens barrel markings]

TC's suggestions for off-camera flash are also good > tho if you want to try a mod to your on-camera flash, it might work for you as well

To soften the direct flash light, I often cut a 5cm sq of one-ply tissue [kleenex or similar] and tape it over the on-camera flash, thus the flash is diffused slightly onto the subject's face

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Old Jun 4, 2012, 5:50 PM   #4
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Hi Stan

You've already received good advice from the above two posts of TC and Phil, so I won't go over that.

Just to say I actually like the pose (relaxed, and natural), plus the model / subject in your photo has beautiful eyes and skin... seeing more of her hair (with better lighting) would add to the overall composition too.

Hoping to see more of your work. I'm not a portrait pro, but I have learned a lot over the years. This photo can be kept as a good memory of course!

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Most of the technical stuff has been covered in the previous posts, so I'll just add that the model is stunning!
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Old Jun 4, 2012, 7:55 PM   #6
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Stan, if all Bulgarian women look like your model, I am moving to Bulgaria!!

Seriously, I find the pose right, she has lovely features, nice skin... The thing that jumped out at me was the shadow left by the flash, behind her and to the left. Please post some more!

I am like Paul, I don't do many "formal" portraits, only when I HAVE to...
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Old Jun 5, 2012, 12:42 AM   #7
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Thank you for The Critique !
It is very helpful for me, because I'd like to get better with the portraits, an area where I've shot so few pictures. And have no practical skills.
I will practice... to get better results

Robert, girls in Bulgaria are some of the most beautiful in the world ! I'm not kidding !
There are many beautiful girls over here, so you better go and look for an airplane ticket

I'll post more
This photo is also not shot seriously, it was on a party.
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Also the top of the head and the eyes need to be much closer to the top of the frame. For eyes in portraits I often follow the rule of thirds. It makes for a pleasing composition.

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Thank you Brad, this is something I did not know. (that the eyes must be much closer to the top of the frame)
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Old Jun 14, 2012, 5:48 AM   #10
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Here is one more ...
Comments are again really welcome

(Is it better and what is still wrong ?)


PS: I know the rule of the thirds is still not followed
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